Monday, March 14, 2016

The Amazing Day at Jelly Park - By Aaliyah

On Friday Gilberthorpe school went to Jelly Park instead of doing devices and other  stuff.We got there in a bus.When we got there we had to wait a bit and we all got bracelets with codes on them because if we didn't we won't be able to go on hider slide.Then we got dressed in the changing room.First  I went down the hider slide I went down on the fast one first.When I went down it gave me a wedge.Next time I went up there I went down the swirly one.It was real fun so I   kept on going on that one.Then my legs  got tired so I went  in the pool.I did a canin ball into the pool.I played a game with my little brother it was called eat the mermaid.Ezra was a shark and I was the mermaid.This is how you play  Ezra just has to grab me and I try to get away.I hope we can do it again!!!  


  1. Hi Aaliyah it's Alyscia, You have written a good story but you're next step will reading through you're story a couple of times to make sure you are not missing any Capital letters, fall stops, or miss spelt words.But great work by the way.


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